Monday, June 14, 2021
spacecraft
Im Elliot I hear a weird noise outside oh no an alien. “ hello my name is ET he hits me then I wake up in a big spaceship ET help no i'm gonna search you for guns or knives ok but i see a window it's dark and stars all round and planets what the heck where are we in space no we aren't yes we are then ET takes me out the big lights blinding there a big buttons and levers.I see a escape pod gone forever bye. The end
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You have some great ideas Jacob.
ReplyDeleteWhat you could do to make your work more powerful is use some more describing words.Tell us more about the alien.What does it look like?.Is it friendly?.Does it have 5 heads and 6 ears?.
It will also make your work more interesting to read.
Would you like to meet an alien if you got the chance?.